Taupo Bay Recount

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Here is the recount I wrote  for an eAsttle writing test in Week 4.  Our teacher marked all our recounts and gave us our scores. Mine came out at Level 3p which is just above the end of year standard for Year Five. I got the best score for using paragraphs and the worst scores for vocabulary and sentence structure.

We helped each other improve them by reading each other’s recount and talking about them. We also used Revision Assistant to help edit each other’s story and Mrs B added some notes as well. Everyone in our room likes Revision Assistant because it’s easy to understand the marks/ notes that it puts on your writing and so it’s quick for us to go and do the fix-ups. We have to get the spelling, grammar and punctuation really good before we are allowed to publish them here. I hope someone will give me some feedback.

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“Wahoo!" I screamed. A couple of days ago, my family and I were preparing for a lovely caravan holiday for three nights at Taupo Bay.“ Mum, Dad, let’s go already.” I shouted.

“ Ok, Ok, Ok, we're coming.” Mum gasped. My family were all trying to get out the door. “Get in the car!” Dad yelled. I grabbed my bag and hopped in. My Mum and Dad came running out the door. My Dad turned on the car. We were all ready to hit the road. One hour later we arrived.

“Yes!!” I yelled. We had finally arrived at the campground.

“ Ok, guys. Let's put the awning up.” Dad said.  We grabbed the awning gear out of the caravan.

Then Kate and I wanted to go to the playground. “ Can we go to the playground Dad?.” Kate asked. “ Yeah I guess so.” Dad replied. We rushed over to it. Then up and down we went on the seesaw. The seesaw hurt our butts because the seat was wooden.

After that we visited our family friends who have a beach house in Taupo bay. We all wandered over there. “ Hello, come in, come in!” screeched Ange. We also saw other famillies at their beach house who we knew. I started to play bullrush with the kids. Charlie was in. He was 8 or 9 years old. He could not tackle anyone.  He was kind of bad at tackling. But we didn’t want to tell him because he would be sad and cry and walk away back to his batch. “ Bull rush!” he yelled. He did not get anyone for the 10th time. How bout the first person who Charlie touches is in with him?” Toby suggested. Everyone agreed. He touched Travis. Travis was now in with Charlie. Travis was a really good tackler. He got heaps of people. It was down to three people. Me, Lily, and Emma were the last three people. I was getting nervous.

But they all went for us one by one. And we ended our fun with a game of Tonker.

Seas/Oceans Thinglink

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This is an activity we did using the Thinglink app. This is the second time I have made something using Thinglink so I hope someone will give me some feedback.

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Grandparent Recount

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Last week was Greats and Grands day. It was an amazing day. My whole class wrote about our Grandparents. We used Revision Assistant to fix our writing. Here it is.

“Hurray!! It’s Friday morning!”I yelled. Me, Olivia, Todd, and Kate were  going to the movies with my gran in Kerikeri! I was super excited. My gran picked us up at our house at 9:30 and off we zoomed).

It took us 20 minutes to drive to Kerikeri from our house. We all had a great talk in the car. Finally, after 20 minutes, we arrived at the movie cinemas in Kerikeri. We got out of the car as quick as Usain Bolt. I jumped over the lines by the pedestrian crossing. We walked through the door and got our tickets. My gran kindly offered to buy us something We all answered, “ No thanks”.

We sat in the movie seats and waited and waited. Finally, they turned on the movies. It took ages for the ads to finish. The movie was really good! It was about a boy who gets lost in the woods. He finds a green,hairy dragon. His name is Elliot. My Gran said it was one of the best movies ever. Afterwards, we drove to the Bake house. My gran is really nice and she asked if we would like to have food. Heaps of food. Of course I wanted food! I love Food!! It is like I am in paradise when I am with food. I had a sausage roll and a sparkling OH! And it tasted GREAT!!! It was as yum as chocolate cake.

We ended the day at Makana Chocolate Factory! We had little chocolate boxes each. Man, our Gran is really generous.

Fishbone Diagram

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Last week was Chinese language week. So we all did a native Chinese animal fishbone diagram. We had to describe the Appearance, Habitat, Diet, Classification, Reproduction and Movement of the animal. I decided to do the Red Panda. Something I enjoyed was describing its appearance. Something I could work on is making sure that the right facts go into the right box.
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Google drawing of Mt Ruapehu

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This is a Google drawing I did of Mt Ruapehu. We are trying to get better at using Google Draw.
I used three similes to describe Mt Ruapehu and Mrs B really loves my buses.
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Ski Trip Thank you letter

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This is an activity we did when we were learning how to write a thank you letter.

Something I think I have done well  is thinking up good things to say.
Next time I think I could improve my spelling as my teacher had to give me 3 tips about spelling.

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6 September 2016

Room 9

Ohaeawai Primary

Tennyson Street

Ohaeawai 0472

Dear Mum and Dad

Thank you so, so, so, so, so much, for letting me go on the amazing, wonderful Ski Trip.

It was the best time ever. It was so much fun learning how to ski. We were zooming like cheetahs.

I think I was good at turning,but maybe next time I should work on jumping. It would be awesome if we could go back again.

Love from Jessica:)

Ski Trip

Hello everyone,
Last week on the 29th of August 2016, all the Year 5 & 6 kids from Ohaeawai School went on a SKI TRIP!! We all met up at school to catch the bus down. It was 6:30 am and we had had to get up really early. It took us nearly 10 hours to drive from Ohaeawai to National Park. For some of us it was the furtherest we had ever been from home.
 On our second day we went skiing. It was the best time ever. We  got split into groups and had little lessons about how to ski. It was very tricky especially if it was your first time. We got taught how to stop, skid, slide, ski without poles and how to go faster. It was really cool.
 Then, we had to ski down a slope.  It was so hot  I had to take off some gear, including my  gloves. So when I skied down......... I tripped up on my skies and my hand slid through the cold snow. I eventually got up but now my hands were freezing.
Anyway, I started skiing again happily until my skies got faster and faster. I was trying to stop but it wasn't working! I was going  as fast as a cheetah..... I was about to trip but......... I didn't.
"YAY!"  I screamed with joy.
 Next,we lined up for the ski lift. I went with my ski teacher. I forget her name but I think she was French but she could speak English. Finally, it was our turn. We had to quickly turn and then jump onto the chair lift. On the way, the ski teacher gave me some chocolate.
Then, we had to ski off the chair lift which was scary at first but you soon got used to it.
Next I tried the Magic Carpet which is kind of like a moving footpath. We skied onto it and then suddenly it just stopped. I nearly fell straight forward onto my face. Skiing is tricky!!!